Ajay could never figure it out.
Her eyes were black, yes black..not the usual brownish-black. Jet black...which could be matched only by the engulfing blackness of the night. Nothing else could describe its intensity better. The black which matched the colour of her hair.
Her hair..pulled back by a simple clip, framing her face. A few short strands which escaped the clip would be brushed off irritatingly by her.
Ajay smiled to himself. Why was he drawn to this girl? He had hardly ever talked to her. She was not very pretty, nor was she very popular. But, he had noticed her on the first day of college. The girl with the big black eyes. Eyes which betrayed every emotion of hers. Eyes which you would love to get lost in. What was happening to him? He had come to the library to study, not to look at girls with pretty eyes. He got back to his books.
"I have had my share of crushes and silly infatuations".. Neha was the love of his life in high school. They were the perfect 'boyfriend-girlfriend'..by all the standards set during school-times - sharing their little secrets and food, holding hands, talking on the phone for hours and watching movies. After a certain point of time, when they grew up, both of them realised they were being immature. After Neha moved to
Ajay realised he was wandering in his thoughts again. He looked at the girl with the black eyes. She was tapping the pen held in her hand, against her lips in thoughtfulness. Seeing her engrossed in her books, he got back to his books and started studying.
15 comments:
nice1
par agar ladki ke eyes grey+blue hota tho aur be accha tho :P
well written, Mridu...but I think it should be continued...adhoora sa feeling aa raha hai :D
@ Muru: abey woh bhoot ki baat nahi kar rahi...pey ille da, ponnu...plz...grey+blue..eye colour combova idu?
I m proud of u mridu,very well done...
I agree with maya, u shud continue....
I think very perfect start of a romantic hindi film script.....
But plz dont take muru's advice....Blue + grey eyes baap re....
Ramya
Mridu.. nice to see you scribble... write.. this is our very own space to express n make the most of it... this is the first time i am reading a creative blog... n i enjoyed it.. i am sure u can become more creative..
well done.. keep rocking !!
good one seems to b real...bt y is tht u describing about someones beauty...as it lies on the eyes of beholder...and if v r looking at someone it doesnot depend on whether she is pretty or not...it mite b tht someones act attract us...may b its my thought...otherwise its good one..:)
@ Muru - no words
@ Maya, Ramya, Ram - thanks guys!
@ Shaji - Hv described the "something" tht Ajay was attracted to.. the girl's eyes.. m nt restricting anyone's thinking :)
very realistic....u have beautifully expressed the thought process..too good...
abhi mujhe samjha tu lectures me books ke peeche aakhon ka itna beautiful sketches kyun karti thi....hehe!
Nice one dear!!!
hey mridzzz mazaa aa gaya... keep it up.. n keep scribbling.............
good start..will follow the rest of the story...hope u gonna write :P - rashmi.
Abe adhura adhura.... pura bada bada likh.... Describe girl more properly.......... Any way good start.....
enjoyed your style of writing.. but like others mentioned it felt a little incomplete.
@ Anuradha - Smart girl :) Thought u would remember tht.. hehe
@ Jayu - thanks buddy
@ Viren & Anu - wl def try to add to it..
Hey, even i agree with the others. You ought to continue, way to go!!!kinda makes u want for more...!!!
Hieeeeee Mridu..Really liked it.Like all others even i want more from you..not knowing earlier abt this Mridu...as always U impressed me one more time...Keep it up
@ Vidya, Manu - Surprise visitors ho tum :) Anyway, glad u liked it.. and yeah.. m trying to finish the story..
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